ext_278775 ([identity profile] legateaumechant.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] owlmoose 2007-11-13 02:45 am (UTC)

Yeah, I felt the same thing re: show don't tell. It was so much of her hammering over and over that Bella was clumsy, and Bella was smart, and Edward was indeed conflicted. He didn't seem all that conflicted to me. Whenever he got conflicted he vanished or didn't contact Bella.

Weakly done.
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