belated posting announcement

[owlmoose]

I had enough energy last night to finish Chapter 34 and post it, but not enough to tell the world that I had done so. So those of you who care have probably read it already, but I wanted to mention it here anyway, for completeness sake.

The chapter is insanely long, about 500 words more than any other chapter in the story (and that's after I cut several hundred words -- no cutting for the sake of cutting, I found many places where it genuinely needed tightening). Most of the chapters are between 3000 and 3500; this one is over 4500. The chapter bears it, I don't find it particularly bloated, but it's not what I was expecting it to be when I planned it. Funny how that happens.

I haven't started the next chapter yet; I want to play through a bit of the game first. I hope to get the chance tonight, we'll see.

Comments

I

[kunstarniki.livejournal.com]

Technical question on which I would appreciate your insight.

I am writing about the coeurl, Nepetu, and am changing the pronoun form in the paragraph from the 'his' to 'its' in order to reflect a change in condition. Does that sound legitimate to you? In order to clarify, I am using 'his' in the first part of the paragraph and 'its' later in the same paragraph. G-d, I am so inarticulate today!

Re: I

[owlmoose.livejournal.com]

I think as long as it's clear to the reader that the change of pronoun is for a reason and not an error on the part of the writer, I think that's definitely within bounds. Consistancy being the key. As long as Nepetu is "he" in every reference up to that point and then "it" in every reference thereafter, I'd say you're safe. Does that make sense?

If you're doing this for the reason I'm guessing, I think it will be a powerful statement. And will tie in perfectly with a similar choice I made in "The Cat".

I

[kunstarniki.livejournal.com]

I thank you and think I will go with it. I have tried it both ways and this seems better for the purpose.

it's clear to the reader

I have had doubts about the intelligence of some readers after the reaction I got from one chap to "Once Upon A Time". LOL Oy vey!