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[owlmoose]

Three chapters in 24 hours, that must be some kind of record.

Part Three is up and can be found here.

The next part is coming along. I doubt that it will come along as quickly as these other first chapters have, but it shouldn't be long, either.

This is something like the sixth or seventh chapter for one of the story quartet to be posted since yesterday. It really amazes me, how we are all feeding on and inspiring one another!

Comments

I

[kunstarniki.livejournal.com]

It really amazes me, how we are all feeding on and inspiring one another!

You're amazed?! I am flabbergasted! I wander around like a woman high on one of the more euphoric drugs. You have taken the Paine I sketched and have given her the dimensionality I could not find for her. Bless your talent. I am perpetually surprised by the directions you other three are finding to pursue and the skill with which you all are telling us about them. Yes, it is a feeding frenzy of a sort and certainly a hot-bed of inspiration.

I

[kunstarniki.livejournal.com]

I thank you for the review. And, like Paine, you see through and into the character of Nooj. No, he cannot understand why she desires his attentions. He is a gaze hound, like me, and has looked at himself in the mirror. He is acutely conscious of how his body appears to the eye and thinks everyone must see him as grotesque as he sees himself. That is why he is so nervous about retaining the affection of Paine and is sub-consciously preparing himself for the moment she mockingly tells him what she really thinks and why she is really sleeping with him. He is deeply frightened inside and unable to correlate that fear with his courage in battle. It, in some way, explains his wish to die. He cannot bear being unmasked as a coward - in any way.

Re: I

[kjswritinglog.livejournal.com]

It's particularly interesting that this chapter came along while my own Part Four was much in my mind. I have written most of the key scene in that chapter, and you will see Paine's reaction to the reality of Nooj soon enough. I think I have it right; we'll see.

By the way, I know why she is really sleeping with him, although it may be awhile before it's revealed in the story. I understand why Nooj can't know that yet, but do *you* want to?

I

[kunstarniki.livejournal.com]

That is like asking a pregnant woman if she wants to know the sex of her baby. No, I do not think so just yet. I need to stay in his skin and I cannot if I am privy to those things he does not know. I may ask later, but for now, I shall remain ignorant. I greatly appreciate your offer.