two for the price of one

[owlmoose]

Spent yesterday night polishing Five and writing Six, and now both are up.

I feel like I finally got the chance to start working in some meaty backstory with Six. Paine's character is thoroughly established as someone who doesn't talk about her past much, so I'm having to work in tidbits organically rather than present a backstory dump, which would probably ring false in a personal diary anyway. It's more challenging but also much more interesting, and I think will make for a better story in the end.

A lovely YAC chapter came along while I was writing, with lots of inspiring bits for my own Seven. Thank you Lee!

ps to RyRy, re. the two vs. three comment in your review of Five: no, three is what I meant. "...trysting with all three of them", as in Nooj worries that Paine is sleeping with all three of the men. But you're right about the other one; it's awkward. I think I may have written it that way to refer back to a turn of phrase which I used earlier in the chapter and then changed.

Comments

I

[kunstarniki.livejournal.com]

Your mood - satisfied. And well you should be. These two latest are reaching into the very heart of Paine's mystery. As I mentioned in my review, the gradual revealation of the back-story is far more effective than a flat recitation can ever be. It is so exciting for me to see the points I laid out picked up and elaborated. *hugs self with sheer pleasure*

Re: I

[kjswritinglog.livejournal.com]

Thanks, as always, for the swift and thorough reviews. It is so terribly exciting to know that I've picked up and expanded on your vision so well.

Like Paine after an evening at the pool, I am satisfied but still wanting more. Now I am itching to start writing on Seven. Damn this working for a living thing anyway.

I

[kunstarniki.livejournal.com]

That second reason you gave for the machina touch so arousing her is still bouncing around in my head. It is so elegantly simple and so perfectly obvious given the background you have sketched. I agree - damn working. I wish you could just stop everything else and pound out your version of the story full time. ;-)

[iamleaper]

I think I may have just misread that one passage, which is both good and bad for you -- the good being that I didn't get stuck on it for too long (which is what every author should strive for, in my opinion), and the bad being that I didn't get what you meant right off. I don't know what that means for you, but you could choose to ignore it if you wish.

I'm just trying to help stylistically, since you're more than owning me at the backplot. ;)

[kjswritinglog.livejournal.com]

Hey, anything you can point out to make the story better is good with me. So thanks. If we do end up cleaning this whole thing up and posting it to a website, I'll probably make that bit more clear, along with all the other little things I've caught after posting.