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KJ ([personal profile] owlmoose) wrote2005-07-19 05:30 am

two for the price of one

Spent yesterday night polishing Five and writing Six, and now both are up.

I feel like I finally got the chance to start working in some meaty backstory with Six. Paine's character is thoroughly established as someone who doesn't talk about her past much, so I'm having to work in tidbits organically rather than present a backstory dump, which would probably ring false in a personal diary anyway. It's more challenging but also much more interesting, and I think will make for a better story in the end.

A lovely YAC chapter came along while I was writing, with lots of inspiring bits for my own Seven. Thank you Lee!

ps to RyRy, re. the two vs. three comment in your review of Five: no, three is what I meant. "...trysting with all three of them", as in Nooj worries that Paine is sleeping with all three of the men. But you're right about the other one; it's awkward. I think I may have written it that way to refer back to a turn of phrase which I used earlier in the chapter and then changed.

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[identity profile] kjswritinglog.livejournal.com 2005-07-19 03:54 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks, as always, for the swift and thorough reviews. It is so terribly exciting to know that I've picked up and expanded on your vision so well.

Like Paine after an evening at the pool, I am satisfied but still wanting more. Now I am itching to start writing on Seven. Damn this working for a living thing anyway.

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[identity profile] kunstarniki.livejournal.com 2005-07-19 04:27 pm (UTC)(link)
That second reason you gave for the machina touch so arousing her is still bouncing around in my head. It is so elegantly simple and so perfectly obvious given the background you have sketched. I agree - damn working. I wish you could just stop everything else and pound out your version of the story full time. ;-)